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Title: Family Circle [fiction by TBF]
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Published: Jun 1, 2005
Author: TBF
Post Date: 2005-06-01 23:12:21 by toddbrendanfahey
Keywords: [fiction, Family, Circle
Views: 234
Comments: 18
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#1. To: Zipporah, Jethro Tull, 1776, wbales, RidinShotgun, Burkeman1, Zoroaster, h-a-l-f-w-i-t-t, mugwort, Diana, Eoghan, gengis gandhi, griper, D_Joyce, lightmind, orangedog, TommyTheMadArtist, rattler, Don, BrianS, NOLAJBS (#0)
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So, who won the tennis match?
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you've got to write me a happy ending!
Complete crap! I "though" silently.
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The only great thing about that pile of shit is that it will never find a publisher.
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Perhaps you could post a sample of your writing for us to critique? BTW Todd has published before, how about you?
Yeah, Fargone Books is the new HarperCollins.
Eight hundred pages? Dude, you need to switch substances. Lay off the speedy stuff and move into the slower things, like trading in the caffeine for a nice amber ale. Take a breath, slow down a notch or two, try using fewer words to say more. Practice haiku, that'll get you in the right mood. Use rich words and paint with a wide brush, instead of the staccato pontillism of profanity and a profusion of verbs. Just my humble opinion.
#2. To: FormerLurker, Neil McIVer, tom007, Uncle Bill, who knows what evil, Red Jones, robin, swarthyguy, honway, Sparker, MUDDOG, lodwick, continental op, itisa1mosttoolate, CWRWinger, OKCSubmariner, christine, Arator (#0)
#3. To: toddbrendanfahey (#1)
#4. To: Fred Mertz (#3)
#5. To: toddbrendanfahey (#4)
#6. To: Fred Mertz (#3)
"Fags!" I though silently.
#7. To: christine (#5)
#8. To: Rebel Without a Clue (#6)
#9. To: toddbrendanfahey (#7)
...great satire rarely has sunny endings.
#10. To: Rebel Without a Clue (#9)
#11. To: Rebel Without a Clue, toddbrendanfahey (#9)
The only great thing about that pile of shit is that it will never find a publisher.
Yez, Baaz!
#12. To: toddbrendanfahey (#10)
#13. To: toddbrendanfahey (#7)
A lot can happen over 800 pages...
 | Gold and silver are real money, paper is but a promise. |
#14. To: Elliott Jackalope (#13)
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#15. To: toddbrendanfahey (#14)
Yes. One question: Who actually read Ulysses? Anyone? Oh sure, lots of people say they did, like lots of people used to claim to have read Naked Lunch. But who actually did? Really, did anyone get past page ten in either of those books?
Ulysses was about 800pp.
| Gold and silver are real money, paper is but a promise. |
#16. To: Elliott Jackalope (#15)
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#17. To: toddbrendanfahey (#16)
Well, as a musician I get a lot of input from people who have little if any musical background, and often their input is valuable. If I hear something negative from one person I don't worry much about it. If I hear similar comments from multiple people then I worry about it and work to improve myself. So take my input for what it's worth and don't sweat it too much.
| Gold and silver are real money, paper is but a promise. |
#18. To: Elliott Jackalope (#17)
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